this is an amazing piece.
all the small things that we do every day come out so strongly in this piece.
i love the last few lines, as well; they bring off the whole piece with a very nonchalant feeling, even though everything leading up to it was very nervous and lovestruck.

I like this because I guess being slightly 'invisible' is easy to relate to... And you sound so bashful in it!

And I liked the beginning. "his guitar strap was red..."

i know you wrote this a while ago...but i've been meaning to tell you i love it...and this is my sad attempt at a review.

i honestly love this poem, because we've all been through it. it's so easy to relate to.

bravo.

i feel like at the end of this, i'm still holding my breath, waiting.. and it pleases me.

hey, i really like this. especially the title is really good. keep writing :)

This has a tender sincerity to it that is enhanced by the specific descriptions. I like how it focuses on feelings, and stays in the moment. Excellent thought at the end line. Well written. MD:77.

This is such a sweet poem! I especially loved the part about having her heart in her eyes. I've often felt that I keep my heart in my eyes as well. Beautifully written.