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well, it was short XD. there was a lull in the intensity of your writing too, but I thought it worked out well in the end. it seems like Chikara and Akikawa are going to be pretty good at jabbing each other with little quips. i thought some of your sentences went a bit too long in some of the paragraphs, making those parts draggy. aside from that, it was up to your usual standards ;). looking forward to reading again, soon.

its nice to see some more dialogue and character interaction, as opposed to the exposition in the earlier chapters. not that either are bad things. i'd have to agree with the statement that as of now , both characters are fairly "narrow", if not immensely similar in their confusion ;). sokumi is quickly becoming my favorite, as her personality seems the most down to earth out of all of them.

the continuous switch from Akikawa and Chikara provided just enough suspense to once again, have me reading every line. the fact that your chapters are fairly short also makes the pacing all the faster. but even with this pacing, you still find areas to stick in descriptive vocabulary and a strong sense of the environment.

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my first time reading a fic from you and i wasn't disappointed. the exposition and dialogue flowed like water and there wasn't a draggy bit to any of it. quick and concise, yet with enough details to fully paint a picture. I especially like how you characterized both Aki and Chikara in such a short amount of text. hope to continue to see more.