This last chapter was kind of confusing, but over all it was really enjoyable! One thing I noticed is that when you describe things are right paragraphs where people are going places, you tend to just list everything that's happening.

Thanks for the cookie, by the way. :D

i just started reading this story today, and i already love it!

the narrator is hilarious!

update soon!

Even better I'm laughing do hard I cannot breath!

OH MY GOD THIS IS FUNNY!

Very cute! Haha!

Have you watched Stranger Than Fiction?

Update. D

Lol. I think I'd hate that narrator. Though it would be a semi cool thing...that is if I was tied up and drugged

I *heart* still all the same. Heh

Aw! Her narrator does have a heart. Lol, just kidding. It was a good chapter for the comic relief as well as good human emotions beyond that. Was happy to see an update D

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Seriously funny, enjoy this

Ahh this is only getting better and better. But i think you made a mistake. Jack can here the voice right? But in the beginning he can't because he thinks Sarah's talking to herself. Or does he only start hearing the voice when the go into the deli?

cute and amusing. I'm interested to see how you further this.

Haha! Something hilarious in the way you bring your character (in an ironic sense) to 'life'.

Enjoyed it.

This is entertaining XD Slightly confusing, but I look forward to reading more! It's very much like "Stranger Than Fiction", though I like it better with the narrator and the subject being aware of each other. Tis funny :D

Cool. I just have one comment: Have you seen "Stranger Than Fiction?" You should before you write anymore... this sort of thing has been done.