*mourns fourth wall*

I love this. My characters all hate me and want me dead and are probably planning a slow and painful way to kill me as I write. Can't wait to read more =]

Here from the Roadhouse.

This is a cool story - I like metafiction (I've written several fanfic pieces in my account over on FF dot net) and this is an interesting treatment of it. The idea of the character at war with his author is a clever one, and calling her the Puppeteer is a cool touch.

Some of the elements in this tale remind me of Last Action Hero (of all things!); in that the character doesn't know he is a character initially, but when he finds out he bemoans the caprice of the authors for giving him nightmare every night. This is a very interesting notion, and one that this chapter neatly wraps up and presents for the reader.

Very good stuff - I'll read and review more when I have time.

Pay it forward!

A very nice narrative in this story. The entire dull attitude of the story along with the narrative's logical insight of everything is nice.

Great two chapters.

C.S.

I really love this story. Your characters are great and this is still incredibly original. I liked when they were talking about the 'breaking the fourth wall' thing, it just really interested me.
I can't wait to see what happens next.

Update soon~

--Jessie my l o v e

p.s. pay it forward

Yay!! That was greatness! ^_^
The details and the main idea was just pain..awesome? XDD
You better continue to write, I may even leave a evil review to help you out sometime. Hope to read more!!

Roadhouse! >>

This was a beautiful opening. I know the other reviewer said it was too much exposition, but I really don't think so. This beginning allowed the reader to really understand the character a bit more. If you had just jumped into the story it wouldn't have had the same amount of depth.

This was really good. :]

I didn't notice any typos or anything, but I really wasn't reading to edit. XD
Anyways, update soon~

--Jessie my l o v e

-p.s. pay it forward

In all honesty, I don't think I've ever seen a more masterful job of breaking the fourth wall. The description is a bit heavy, but other than that the writing is masterful as always; should turn out to be a most interesting story.

:) xo

There is way too much telling and exposition. Instead, start right into your story and layer these details through the story.