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simpleplan13 2009-01-14 . chapter 1
Ok you start of the first two with just dealing with the sense that you end with. Then you changed to longer paragraphs with more than one sense. I liked the beginning way better. The ending also confused me a bit with the "it's old" but I'm probably just missing something...

Anyway, your images were really wonderful and I liked how you sectioned out the one word. It adds to the pice nicely.
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