|Reviews for Once Upon A Nightmare|
| Blackers 1/24/10 . chapter 13
squwe!*runs in circles until slams into wall* ow*shakes head, gains composure and sits back at computer with serious expression* the long awaited oficial hookup has arived!… were will alex go when she gets back to earth?
| Blackers 1/24/10 . chapter 12
hhwhat? “you should be mine” heh? i think he could have done a more tactful job of confessing.(if you could consider it a confesion) and the timing- atrosious.
| J.L. Lofthouse 1/24/10 . chapter 19
yey im so glad she is back with everyone :) although i would love to know whats going on with Armand, o can't wait for the next chapter :)
| Kirhava 1/24/10 . chapter 19
The last scene actually made me laugh out loud!
And I love Alexander’s personality this chapter. I almost forgot how rebel he was.
| Red Warden 1/23/10 . chapter 19
So far I rally like this story. I love the originality of the story, and how it doesn’t follow the same guild lines that most supernatural stories do. Your monsters are different and new, and they are not really even monsters. And who can’t like Violet, every reader can identify with her on some level. Can’t wait to see what happens next.
| FlorVerde 1/23/10 . chapter 19
Oh... threesome or love triangle? I'm sort of torn between either way :p although I'm hoping whatever happens, they'll each find someone! :) (Me and my insatiable lust for romance and happy endings...) And I wonder what's up with Armand and what exactly his darkness is... Thanks for the really fast update :)
| Dani West 1/23/10 . chapter 19
Ugh! I said I wouldn't review again! D: I can't help it.
I'll have to second another reviewer- I feel as though this is incredibly rushed. I *can* sympathize. The closer you get to the end, the harder it is to write. You're either getting a little bored, or losing some connection with the plot... etc, etc. So you have to *force* yourself, all the while holding a steak knife from last night's dinner to your typing-hand.
It was a good chapter- very readable. I suppose it's just that not much happened in it. I understand you need a lull chapter now and then, so good work on that much. This is still a good story- a freaking fantastic story! Especially when all I can find *wrong* with it is a little bit of tone wonkiness and tempo malfunctions. Keep on going! You can make it!
By the way? Your beta is *God*. I don't know *where* you found her, but I *envy you*. Good job, Asa, on working so fast! And Miss Jak! Fantastic. : ) Good luck with the rest.
| Kirei.Kappukeki 1/23/10 . chapter 19
* hyperventilates* Omg you killed Gloom TT_TT. OmG SWEENY IS PROBABLY PISSED! Omg Alex is all up in real world causing a ruckus! OMG Armand is awesome but so sad and depressed. OMG ARE WE GOING TO EVER GET A ARMAND/VIOLET MOMENT!
Okay. Now that I've stopped fan girling for a moment. Despite these two chapters feeling a little rushed I really like them. Violet has changed so much for the better and Alex is excitable as ever (if not even developing a sweet side?). Cant wait to find out where Hina is, she's so evil. I bet she wreaking havoc somewhere. I love you. I love your story. With slightly more work, this could definitely be published. Oh woe is me until you update!
| happy ever afterxx 1/23/10 . chapter 19
So good! But what's up with Armand? More soon?
| ArieiDelmonte 1/23/10 . chapter 19
Very nice chapter! I really liked this one. :D
I love all of the little pet names Alexander calls Violet.
GRR! Alexander! Can't you just leave Violet and Armand alone for a while! *pouts*
Yay! My Fair Lady! Woo!
You can't do this! You can't bring Armand back into the picture now, not when I was so certain that Violet and Alexander were getting together. I mean, Armand is still my favorite by far, but at least I was on the outskirts of team Alexander/Violet...
Can't wait for the next chapter!
| Ray-Anne 1/23/10 . chapter 19
You rushed this.
| DevourtheStars 1/21/10 . chapter 18
I love this story. All time favorite. Diggin' the gothic literature. Love the quotes. Keep up the awesome work, you're doing great! (: excited for the next chapter!
| Lone-Reaper 1/21/10 . chapter 18
YES! Alex is back! X-D And you updated on Edgar Allan Poe's birthday...weird, ironic, or maybe coincidence? Or not...
Before I move on, you requested some CC, so I'd like to point out something that another reviewer said, and that I agree with.
Don't get me wrong, I love the dark humor that you give us, and even the more lighthearted moments of the story, but in the last few chapters, the scenes that should have been emotionally stirring or heartbreaking, like when Armand got stabbed, or when Violet saw the darkest story of Hina and Jack, I didn't feel the same emotion that I felt in scenes like when Alexander almost died in the cave, or when he was telling Violet about Enna.
Perhaps it's just the way that the wording goes, and the lenth of the scene.
Again don't get me wrong, ch 17 was still a good chapter, it just needs a little work.
But in this latest chapter, however, the emotional scenes were VERY well written. Like when Violet glared at that kid who almost sat on her, then started crying because it reminded her of Alexander. For such a short scene, it was still a perfect combination of humor and sadness.
And as for the scene when Alexander revealed that our super lovable, library owning, Love of Gothic Literature, Gloom, has been killed, I felt almost as bad as Violet. TT
I guess that answers my question about Violet's powers.
But I loved seeing Alex walk into the classroom, and almost put the kids under cardiac arrest. 0O
When Alexander told Violet that he loves her, I almost went "squee!" so loud that it could be heard from across the road. And when Alex came over to her house and talked with her dad, Violet's comment about losing the flower of her virginity made me laugh quite a lot. xD
This is a great book (despite the fact that you killed Gloom! Though, now you'll have Sweeney to deal with...) And I hope you get it published someday.
BTW, if you'd like to read a book that mixes great humor and roller-coaster-ride-emotion quite well, I suggest you read "By the Light of the Moon" by Mr. Dean Koontz. It's a far cry from gothic literature, but it is one of my favorite books from one of my favorite authors.
| TumbleWeed23 1/21/10 . chapter 18
well, i didn't spot any mistakes...however, i noticed how much more confident violet is...not only her talking to the new girl but also the way she speaks to her dad and the way she speaks to alex...i wouldn't think it was the same person if i compared the first chapter and this one...but it's a good thing i think, because after going through all those things...(especially things you've been taught not to believe in and things you'd be scared shit off if you were facing them in the real world)...people change. quite dramatically change...so it's good. :)
| happy ever afterxx 1/20/10 . chapter 18
Oh yay they're going back! Seriously great chapter, it was so sweet! Please more soon?