Who is that girl with red hair? She sounds sexy.
Is it possible for me to ever post a serious reply?
You looked so pretty that evening.

Very, very good beginning. I'm one of those people where if I don't get pulled in within the first few seconds, I'll stop reading. Anyway, the writing was good, descriptive. The only thing that pestered me was the use of the word "seconds" too much. That may just be me nitpicking, though.

I love it thus far. It paints a blurry picture in my mind of smeared faces with red hair and red nails just barely visible.

Patiently waiting,