Man i love this. i'm very sorry that i havent ewviewed you in what... ever its been a bussy life but i still should have. so i like this very well. and i'll attempt to keep in touch?

Hey, I really liked this because it was kind of a cliche theme, but you twisted it around and made it new. I especially loved the last two stanzas. Keep up the good work :)

I thought this was a very good idea for a poem. I like the line "stepping lightly on the sand, looking deep into the sea." however I really didn't care for the rest. I thought you should have been more subtle in your point. I would consider rewriting this line "Ever jealous of her older sister,

Believing she is invisible." and "A blonde of a darker hue

Watches that of a lighter one." They didn't seem to flow with the "little sister" vernacular here. Overall 5/10. Thanks for posting