this is a really good story :D and you should write more regularly, even if i'm not in any position to say that... =D

Cool idea. More please!

This kind of reminds me of Pendragon...

Anyways. Your writing style is very comfortable, and I like how much you pay attention to details. The main character is likable enough, and although the story is moving rather slowly, I think you've done a good job so far.

Suggestions
1. You should check it through for spelling and grammar mistakes.
2. Although details are generally good, it gets kind of boring when you write through every moment and action that occurs.

There are good things about this and there are not so good things about this. First off, the narrative does a good job of opening up the story and describing the charaters. Teh little mundane actions that they do add life to the whole thing, do not lose sight of those in future chapters.

Second, Roan is a good main character so far. His personality is understandable given his situation and it is entertaining just to see what happens with him next. However, the notion of the fact that he has no friends...is rather hard to believe.

One would think that at his school, someone would overlook his crimson eyes and the fact that he lives in a dump, and befriend him because he's a nice guy. It is understandable that he's not the most popular kid, but the commonly used idea of "the main character has no friends and is an orphan," rather grates on the whole story.

But Tad provides interest as the guardian character. If he was fleshed out a bit more, he could be a very interesting catalyst in whatever is going to happen next, (though I have a few ideas just by looking in on the subtext in the story on what will happen).

Just broaden the scope of the story a bit more and maybe slow things down a bit. Have some more of the characters get a chance to properly introduce themselves. That having been said, I think that with a little polish and shine, the story coudl definitely hold some real weight.