Hey,
Im so sorry that I didn't review as soon as you wrote this chapter, I have been so busy of late, with homework and stuff. GAH! Anyhow I really really enjoyed this chapter, it was definately a great read! It was written well and the description of senses and feelings is fantastic! I just have a teency weency bit of criticism for you - when you write the speech, I was getting a little confused as to who was speaking, especially when it seemed he was talking,and you wrote, I smirked, or something along the lines of that afterwards. I think it would really help the body of your story, to add speech descriptions, such as when Addie speaks:
“You are shagging my best friend?!” he shrugged.
I would recommend writting something along the lines of:
"You are shagging my best friend?!", I screamed, full of rage and confusion. James looked back at me and shrugged.

Just to make it easier, as to tell who is speaking. Overall this was a great chapter though, and I shall be adding this story into my favourites right about now :)!

Can't wait for the update! Peace out and happy writing!

great job... i just want to say that i love reading this.. keep it coming.. i'll try to review more :D.. ily and this story!

Loved this chapter! It was awesome! Ohh alice is so mean! :(

Peace out and happy writting!

hey nice plot. (: read the summary/ :D

Hey
I really like this story... it caught my attention immedietly for some reason! but yeah I love the story! I don't find it confusing at all, however there are some commas missing which causes the sentences to blend so sometimes that can confuse people when reading! :-) its a good story though... a sad but happy kind of story!

Peace out and happy writting!

wait um..if he's been under contract so long,meaning he was dead,how did he go to her high school? And almost squash her on the stairs? I'm sorry but this confuses me too much so I don't think I can read further.But yr concept and Idea sounds pretty good!

um well I like it but it's kinda confusing...

great story ^^ but cani just say having motions at the end of each spoken sentence is confusing as to who said the sentence like "blahblah" i smiled it sounds like i just smiled after speaking when it was really the other character talking, the story line's great so far and that was me getting confused :P but you know its my opinion so bleh anyways HAPPY WRITING :D

Your friend edited pretty well but you still have a few errors. In the first sentence you wrote "by your self" when your self should be one word -yourself. You also need a few commas here and there. Your ideas are really good and I wish this was longer!!