I am in love with this story. It was so vivid!

Bitch got what he deserved.

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Awesome story !

nice chapter.

oh no D:

haha, canada must a great place. :D

wow, this should be reviewed more often. this is great. seriously. i love this first chapter. :D

i have just joined this site and am going to be submitting some of my own stories as soon as i get the chance, reading the first chapter i think this story has great potential, good use of dialogue and description, can't wait to read on. also be sure to check out some of my writing as soon as i am able to put them on my profile, keep up the good work.

Hey, great stuff! I just read the first chapter!

One thing though... Isn't the Cellar Door a like Jazz Bar? Cuz, there's one in the place I live in and their is...haha.

But, really great story!

Also, if you could find the time... I would love for you to check out my story... It's the first chapter just tell me what ya think... But, yeah.

LOL, that's funny. All through this I kept thinking of Donnie Darko, and not just because of the title. The feel of it, it's hard to explain. Anyway, I really like this.

Hey! Very nice! I like it. I really like your use of the first person, how it transfers from character to character. I will absolutely add this to Epicity. The only thing that I could find that could use some work is the descriptions of the torturing scenes. I know that sounds really creepy, but you capture your characters personalities so well, but when it comes to the horrifying scenes there isn't enough substance. But at the same time, don't tell us everything... because then nothing would be left to the imagination.

Overall though this story is really strong and I really enjoyed reading the first part!

I LOVED THIS!

And I must admit, go to the right places and Canada is one of the most beautiful countries you'll see! (Okay I may be a little biast because I live here.) But oh well! I love it, and wouldn't leave it is I didn't have an interest to see the rest of the world too!

Unfortunately I don't have time to continue reading onto the nect... Eleven chapters, but I will continue as soon as I can! Your prolouge has greatly interesred me!

Juls

(Dark Dragon - Fire Fox)

I knew it! It's too bad that she died. I really liked Beth's character :( Anyway, great story!

hm something's up with this Dayne guy...