YOU MAKE ME SAD CHANGING THE NAME! I LOVE YOU BETHY-BOO KEEP IT AS THE WORLD AMONG US: DARK SHADOWS THE NEW NAME ISN'T AS BADASS!

-cries and cries and cries some more-

-hugs you-

-sighs and stabs children who dislike your original title-


BETHY!

I love your first chapter, but it also made me a bit uneasy. Seeing Hades acting in a more teenage way makes me wonder a lot. He is the god of the dead, so I sort of have a painted picture of him being very evil and more demanding than how he is portrayed, such as when Damien calls him dad, I'd expect Hades to be strict and make him call him father instead, but other than that, I have no problems with your writing, I love it so far. DuVessa is quite devious in chapter one, and I hope she can keep it going in chapter two. :)

Oh my god I just read what you have so far and I love all of it!! When you start adding more chapters message me!! I love how you use Greek Mythology. It makes it oh so very interesting.

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Jade

Okay I am defantly not done reading this. I just have RP to attend to then I need to rest. But I will read the rest tomorrow. I defantly put this in my bookmark thing. I will admit this is a very good story I am liking it so far. If this ever does become officially published I defantly want a copy of it. I defantly love these kind of stories. Epically with gods and Goddesses. I'll give my final review tomorrow one I am fully done

I have to say this is an amazing book so far! Keep up the good work!

i cudnt read it at the time but im adding its a definate to read :)

I love it. Keep writing. The names are very unique. Maybe you cud read my story

Well helo!
I want you to know right now I am reading just to read, and not to edit. If you want me to start doing that I will, but we'll conduct such business in private. First of all I need to say that you're underlying story and plot are moving, and I am hooked and really enjoying watching it all unfold. Secondly, aside from a few minor errors, there aren't many spelling errors, most of your errors are grammatical, and a few other things I noticed that need improvement. But like I said, I can tell you those over dinner some time. ANYway... you have a great plot going and a great story, and to tell the truth no writer es ever truly free of the editing process. You're making wonderful progress so far and I can't wait to read the next installment of this fabulous story.

Cheers! -smirks and raises a glass of wine- Here's to the future, **.

OH YEAH! You're MY **. Because I said so, and NO ONE ELSE can have you. Except Kevin, with my permission.
XD

E was alarmingly handsome, and she decided to watch herself around him. He was Hade’s son after all.



“Thanks dad. I’m on my back now. Damien’s coming with me.”

Hi Love. I found some words that may need to be corrected.

DuVessa saw that there was going to be an argument between Damien and Persephone, and decided to but in.

"butt"?

“I know that Damien,” she said with a soft sigh. “I was hoping that we could have a sort of victory part just the two of us. I guess you wouldn’t be up for that though, now would you?”

"party"?