DUDE! (ok they're rubbing off on me :)) I like this, I really like this! I love his comparison to Mary Antoinette! And the twins pure unadulterate...in sync...ness...
Keep on writing! ;D

Oh, jackpot. This story sounds quite cool.
JM

Chewwy, don't try to take on too many projects at once [even though most love them all so much it's probably the reason why my resting heart rate is so high all the time]. I love it. It's the cliche with a slight twist. And your parting words are just 'grah'? What's up?

Fantastical beginning; I absolutely love the twins :)

i like it so far and i must say i love the twins :D

This is really great, and I can't wait for the rest! :D

But, there was something that didn't quite make sense to me:

You wrote, "..and her long bangs hung down into her eyes, hiding their ugly shade of quite plain brown."
And Michael said that, right.
And then later on, he says (you write) "I could see a flicker of color. Were they from here eyes? What colour were her eyes anyway?"

It sounds like he contradicted himself.

Why five?

And can't wait!

kthnxbai,

Martin the Waterskier