Oh this is great! I totally enjoyed reading it. Keep writing please!

~Anna~ ^_^

wow, awesome!

the flowing comes out naturally, and the way you made a sybject so simple a great topic!

"Words have all been taken
and used until their death"
Lovely wording! The rhymes flowed well and didn't seem forced at all. I love the rhythm and tone of this, and especially like how you ended it with a question. Great piece!
-Sasha

I liked what you have to say here, but I feel like the formating was off.

You are talking about wanting to be free, yet your verses are very constrained. Just something I noticed. Keep up the good work.

Much love,
Juliet.

Wow! That was great!

I really like the concept as well as how you've managed o keep a constant rhyme scheme that stays with the meter. Nice work with this piece.

Aprils Fools Day Review (courtesy of Frac)

In the first line, I really felt like it should be flames, not flame. I mean the thoughts going up in just one flame seems a bit odd.

I really liked the first two stanzas. The rhyming was subtle and worked nicely. I also think anyone on fp can relate to this and you describe it differently than the other writers block pieces I've seen which was great.

That said the ending sounded kind of forced. When I read the a/n, it felt almost like you threw it in there so it would fit. I'm not saying that's what happened, just that it sounds a bit like that. Maybe if you continued with the idea. Explain how the words got that way. Really that line just seems like the beginnig of a whole new piece not the ending of this one.

Still, it's a really good job.

As another reviewer said, I interpreted this as more than merely a poem admonishing writer's block. From the summary and title, I came in thinking of "There is nothing new under the sun."

The rhythm was very steady and consistent, and I didn't notice the rhyming scene since it flowed so well until I'm looking over your words right now.

[Thoughts go up in flame,
And ideas fly away.]
I liked how you wound "go up in flame" right onto "fly away." It reinforces my imagery of a stack of books being burned, and metaphorically their souls drifting up.

[Words are all the same.
I have nothing new to say.]
I liked the latter line for its show of characterization, and it connects later to her question at the end, so it seems more believable and not just out and random musing.

[Words have all been taken
And used until their death.]
Since "used" is a versatile enough word, I interpreted as the "exploit" definition, like people abuse words to extinction.

[Written and forsaken
Until their final breath.]
I like how breath delves into the idea that words are alive and it connects with the personification of it in this poem.

[My thoughts so torn asunder-]
I like the sound of "so torn asunder."

The way you separated the last line by itself really enhances the question.

Nice job.

I love the first line! It just jump starts from there!

(Depth review for RG)

:) I remember this from the WCC!

Even the first time I read it, the RHYTHM is was sticks out the most. Honestly, your rhyming in this is probably one of the best I've read in while. You know how some rhymes come out sounding obvious? And yours doesn't do that /at all/. I was really impressed by that. :)

Next, I liked your FORM. The stanzas were arranged clearly and assisted your words well; so that's good. Because most of the time, crappy formatting can distract from even the nicest of poems.

The FLOW. The flow of the poem was amazing to me. And that's probably largely affected by the rhyming, which I've already complimented. The beginning:

Thoughts go up in flame,
And ideas fly away.
Words are all the same.
I have nothing new to say.

/Loved/ those lines. This may sound weird, but the flow almost has an old-fashioned poetry feel to it? Anyway, it had a nice /sound/ as I read it. It was a little choppy in the third stanza:

How words shall obey
My thoughts so torn asunder-

But it worked for me. "Thoughts torn asunder", hello. Choppiness fit with the words, so I can't even bring myself to complain about it. ^_^

Your SUBJECT is cool. You joked about writing of writer's block, but if I hadn't read the a/n, the poem feels more universal than that. It reads like you're speaking of just not having the words to say what you want or that your thoughts are so jumbled (for whatever reason). If anything, the subject was a bit vague since it was really just an emotion... But I liked it. It's something everyone can relate to.

And I've already had four points, but I'll throw in 'ENJOYMENT' too. ;)

I loved everything about this. I enjoyed it. A lot. I couldn't even find someting negative to say. The ending had a nice effect, and the words were pretty and everything. So very good job.

Happy Valentine's!

Writer's block...an old foe -.-. I empathize. Anyway, as far as poems about writer's block go, I liked this one. The subtle personification of the words was cool, when you said that they "have all been taken and used until their death." I thought that was original =). My only problem is "how words shall obey". I don't think it's a problem of rhythm so much as it is just, if you were to read it out loud, someone could get stuck on the S's in "words shall." Does that make sense? This is super long. Bye!

"Thoughts go up in flame." I loved this opening line. The imagery is beautiful--thoughts, memories, unspoken desires...floating up in smoke...burning higher...wow! :)

The poem rhymes well, and the structure is good--although, I think it would be better to put the final line with the third stanza to keep the form constant.

Keep up the good work,
-Isca

(The Review Game - Poems - Easy Fix)

wow i really love this! this is a perfect example of how we all need to be more creative and original because everything has already been done before. i really like the message =] it's so true!

i also like the rhyming scheme, it does well in this piece and keeps the flow going

brilliant =]

Hehehe! I feel this way sometimes! Thanks for the review by the way!

writing about not being able to write
or in your situation- nothing new to write about

is the best cure to writers block


i really love the first stanza