Just a suggestion, story has great potential but there are some errors in the English grammar. Perhaps have someone correct it for you? Would make it a lot easier to read :).

This story was fantastic! I love your writing style! :)

Can't wait to read the sequel...

--Alex

I don't really have anything to say except that I absolutely love this story! It has a great plot, and fantastic characters. I love the way that you've used so many different species. Keep up the good work!

i love this story! one suggestion though, in chapter 11 Night says that he could get "millions of times prettier than you", which is horrible! I understand what he is trying to say but i dont think that callous remark fits with his character...

Wow, i loved the story! It was really well written, and had an exelant plotline. Exept for a few gramatical and spelling mistakes once in a while, I deem it, one of my favorite stories!! =D

i just read the prolog and somthing bugged me... this one line... it said "His teeth, or should I say fangs, snarled at me hungrily." I didn't know teeth themselves could growl...

I don't like what he did to Chris. I don't like that at all. How dare he? Who does he think he is?

Aww...Velvet Shadows is over. I know there will be another book, but somehow I just can't think that there won't be more updates on this one.

I'm glad Arc and Chris are friends again, and I like the way you did it. I don't beleive in loving two people at the same time as well. It was funny how childish and whiny he bacame when he talked about Night. As if he stole his candy or teddy bear. I think Arc would be the character I can relate with most...

Will you please explain Liz to me? I'm not sure I recall too much about her.

I'm not sure if you want me to continue with the edits, meassage me if you do.

Great job, and I can't wait for more!

I really liked this chapter, as I did all the others. I liked that you made Night different from Edward, and I can't wait to read your sequel and Cross my Heart. Anyway, nice job, and please continue writing. :)

When I heard that this is the last chapter I almost fell off my chair. Then, I saw that there will be another instalmnet, and I got back up again! I liked this chapter. It was kind of short compared to the others, but you can see a lot of personality from all three of them.

There was a line in there, for which I have praise and questions “Today is your birthday. I didn't see the need to hold back my...desire.” I don't know if it's the way it's written, the ..., but something made me see his expression ver, very clearly. It was amazingly written. I'm not sure though if what I'm thinking is true. How it being her birthday doesn't give him a need to hold back. I remember he would, because of his father, does her birthday give him an excuse to forget about his father for a little while?

Arc is so childish. He's like a five year old trying to act all grown up. He comes in and showers her with words "Stupid evil vampires" "And I still couldn't go!" and then he tries to act all high and mighty around Night, and put a claim on her, like a favourite play mate. It's funny. I like it. I really do wish he could meet Cynthia.

What happened with Sam and them? They were really angry and I want to know how they feel about her now. Will that be in the next instalmnet?

Did you get my email with the edits? I'm not sure it got through, please reply to it so that I know, or to this comment.l

Um, Twilight much? I mean, that so reminded me of Twilight, with Night as Edward and Arc as Jacob. I mean, Arc was the cheerful, mildly annoying best friend who got jealous of the boyfriend (Night).

It was well written, though. I can't wait for the epilogue and the sequel! YAY! YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!

it's superb.chris's situation is just like bella...with arc as jacob...i hope you didn't mind the com[parison...anyway...can't wait to read the sequel...bet it's gonna be wonderful...

ishani
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like always, awsome!

Gratz on completing the story!

I wonder what's going to happen w/ arc now... hehehehe...

Keep up the awsome work.

Tricia

Yeaahh! You finished it!! It's great!!
I just love the ending! Night and Chris (L)
You could do a sequel... I guess it up to you. If you're happy with the ending you could not write it. Though, if you do have loads of great ideas, then I'd say for it!
I love the story and the ending was great!
Are you going to write it from Night's point of view? It would be interesting...
Anyway, it's your choice!!
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Yay~ Night and Chris! I'm happy. Do you know what I like about Night? He has weaknesses. He isn't completely perfect, noble, or kind. I much more real character then many others. Try to put some more weaknessess in Chris as well, not just the obvious lack of complete physical strength.

“Please behave,” he said, trying to hide a smile.
...I won't argue. We'll save that for the rewrite.

Good job on the chapter. It was a bit quick, and poor Arc was forgotten but it was interesting nonetheless. I really would like to see interaction between Arc and Cynthia. It would be funny.