this is sounding awesome! theres only one thing im not quite sure on: did the prologue really happen?? Because i don't know!

i hope you update soon, and jesse sounds really cool!

*whoots* I know it's on hiatus, but I'm still going to comment

Hehe. Damn, that is not a situation you wanna find yourself in... You guys have to update, seriously, make the ultimate sacrifices. Give the girl some friends already! Ha. Wouldn't it be cool if she used the same fire power thingy on Beverly? Oh yeah.

Update? ):

It's been so long...

(: This is amazing so far. I love it! Update soon!

WOW! Fantastic chapter :D I loved it so much. I can't wait to see what will happen next. Keep up the awesome work, and please try to update again soon! I can't wait to see what will happen next :D

Ep! This is so exciting! I can't wait to see what happens next; Jesse seems like such an interesting character! And... varsity cheerleading team? Funny, I'd never heard of that before... definitely a nice touch for Beverly's stereotype though! I'm looking forward to the next chapter a lot. :) Happy writing!

oh i liked this one. beverly is very mean but jesse is cool. i cant wait to see what happens next. do you know when youre going to update?

That was a good chapter, I like Jesse.

I like this too but there was alot of text.

nanaimo reminds me nanowrimo. HAHA.

"Suddenly, a pounding guitar riff exploded in her ears out of nowhere." - woo! party in your pants! HAHAHA.

I'm lovin' Mitch more and more. On a random note, I typed a B instead of M at first. Mitch the B.itch! HAHA. Mitch is S-K's b.itch! (i put the . b/c it'll probably be taken off from this review due to it's profanity)

Aww. Mitch is hiding. Mitch's gf is S-K. Haha.

"They’re easy to spot. Look for the ones with sticks up their asses.” - loved that line.

shrtr review than usual, but me is tired. 6hr shifts suck. i want to keep this habit going. one chp behind. haha. xD i like it so far! can't wait for jesse. heh

oh i hope he gets slapped. seriously. That's got to be the dumbest thing ...okay ONE of the dumbest things he could have said.

I like Mitch, he is very nice. This chapter was very funny, I liked it very much. You are a very good writer!

I like this, it was scary though, and I'm confused, did she set the man on fire? It scared me, but it was really good. I'll keep reading because it's good.

Thanks for the update! It's good to know I'm helping in some way. You DO love denial, Kait! You love fire too. LOL! The review:

The chapter title makes me excited, but maybe I'm getting my hopes up. Please be a hot chapter. Oh, I love the quote you start with. That's perfect foreshadowing right there. You two always have such great quotes!

I feel so bad for Dani. She's been through complete hell and she's all alone in this school. I think her experiences naturally are going to alienate her. I really wish Mitch were there for her. "All the students around her were talking and laughing, and here she was, with only her dinner for company."- that tugs at my heart.

OH! Enter the sexy guy. Huh, I like how you guys described the way he looks at her and how it's different from the way everyone else does. That definitely indicates he's significant. He IS going to be significant, isn't he? He sounds hot. LOL. "predictably unfathomable dark eyes"- this made me laugh. It lets you get away with a cliche description because you flat out acknowledge that it's cliche. Very clever! I like how Dani is intrigued by him. I think they're both intrigued by each other. They're staring and everything. "Besides, if anyone looked at her crosswise, he’d simply knock their front teeth out."- LOL! It sounds like Mitch! I love how everything you guys write sounds exactly like your characters even though I don't even know your characters that well yet.

He watches her as she leaves ... smitten already. I assume I'm supposed to fall in love with this guy. I wonder who he is.

"She’d bet anything that hell would sound like scribbling pencils."- I laughed at this as well. Again, I like what you guys did about the last-name calling. I always thought it was strange to read in stories because it didn't happen in my school. But it makes sense that it would at this private school for the stinking rich. Or as the wonderful Mitch would say, the ass-kissers. Oh no, oh no! I knew she was going to be reminded of her parent's death somewhere. Aw. I really do feel for Dani. To fail a math test on top of everything else is just terrible. You two are mean.

I like the bit about the pregnancy test. It shows that these girls are shallow and not too intelligent, while Dani is more logical. Great characterization! Beverly makes me think one thing: bitch. Beverly Hills? LOL. I like that! I love how Beverly compares Dani's eyes to grass. It's definitely not a compliment, but it isn't really a slur either. I think the queen bitch is cliche, but you guys wrote it too well for me to complain. It'll make for good drama anyways. I hope Dani pulls her hair out.

I like Evan! Finally, someone who's actually nice. Oh, so it's because Beverly is REALLY rich. That makes sense. Hm. Does Evan like her or am I reading that into it? He seems really sweet and nice! I wouldn't object if they got together. I think what Dani did was really noble. It obviously hurts to have to eat alone but she doesn't want others to have to suffer. I really like Dani.

Beverly's in her P.E. class? Oh-oh. "Must be something in the water here. Gold dust or something."- clever. I do always wonder why there are always so many cute guys in these stories. The water explains it all. LOL. I don't watch Bones, but I know it's supposed to be pretty good. Is that really a nickname from the show? That's hilarious. "Popcorn. Hot. Spanish. Spanish popcorn."- brilliant! Mr. Smith sounds like a bastard, but I'm glad there's someone else in the school who's nice to Dani.

Oh my God! I'm absolutely horrified at what the girls did to Dani (it's cruel and I would be in tears) but at the same time I kind of want to laugh. It is pretty funny. But oh my God, you guys! SO mean!

Is Jesse the guy who stared at Dani? I bet he is. Oh my God, the underwear hits him in the head? Wow, that is going to be awkward. Hm. If Jesse isn't able to pinpoint the size of the bra immediately then that means he isn't a player I'm guessing. I read the character biography that you guys have up on the website and Jesse definitely fits it. It helps read him, alittle. AHAH! It was him. Okay you guys aren't that mean. But wow what a thing to say. Poor Dani. I like Jesse already!

Wow I didn't mean for this to get so long! But Kait said this was an imporant chapter so I didn't want to miss anything. It was definitely a huge progression plot-wise. I absolutely loved it. Really amazing work, guys. I am seriously impressed. Keep it up!

-liz