this story really has a good begining so far, and after your done with your other story i would love for you to try to finish this one.

OMG! This so intense! This is really really good! Will there be a second chapter? Please do!
Oh, and the sing for me reminded me of the phantom of the opera!
Narq.

Wow, this is really good, and I desperately want to hear more of this story. I love vampire stories, and this one is written very well. And it's in some way different from the many others I've read on this site. I can't really describe what it is that seems different about your vampire story, but I like it. :) Please continue this story when you get the chance! Great job as always!

What is their story? How has this happened? What is going to happen between them? What is their history? Why doesn't she remember?

You feel, all these questions and no answers. I, personally, think you should make this into a full story so that it all can be explained. Just sayin'.

Please think about it, love!

A good one-shot, if nothing else =)

I remain your loyal reader,
Serai Rhifune

I liked this, I could see a whole story coming from it. It needs more. Since you have no idea what you want to do with this story though, I do think you should finish your other one, and work on this one occassionally. Keeping it short would work too, like the description says 'two shot'. Short stories are over looked on this site in my opinion though, most want that long story to keep them occupided for awhile. Keep up the good work,
Alice

Now there are two stories I'm waiting for you to tell. :)

Thanks for giving me things to read. I like how your stories mix dark mystery with lightheartedness.

YES! A vampire story that wasn't written by a n00b!

~Miki