This is SO interesting. I don't understand it, and I think some of your word-choice is a little bit TOO obscure to be truly engrossing, but this is the sort of thing I'd like to read over and over. This is the sort of poem that is crying out to be analysed. One thing: 'nowhere' is one word (I'm not sure if that was deliberate or not, to put emphasis on 'no'). I love the use of the adjective 'deciduous' - I don't know whether it's because it looks similar to the word 'delicious', but it just makes me want to taste something, hold something in my mouth; it has that full, ripe quality to it. With the rhetorical question in the 3rd stanza I'd be interested to know whether you are addressing the 'strip malls', or talking to Long Island in general?

I think the poem became a bit weaker with the inclusion of 'children' and 'kid' - although it fits with the style of the voice of the poem, they seemed a bit like filler words, possibly because they were on the end of the lines. The best bit of this poem is by far the last two lines. They are absolutely intriguing! Really original work here.