This is incredible. I don't read too much because it's honestly rare that I find a published novel that keeps me interested and entertained, but then I come on FictionPress and find something as great as this story that kept me constantly entertained, interested and addicted from start to finish! And what a great ending, I was close to crying while reading the final chapter. You're a great writer and I hope you get the recognition you deserve in the future. Thank you. _

I have loved the story ever since i found the 1st few chapts up.. you have done an amazing job writing this and even tho i dont know you im happy to say im proud of you for writing such an amazing and hard to write story.. for as i know alot of us have felt this way before and to see something so raw put into what alot of us feel is.. urgh now i cant think of the word ...

i just want to say you have written a absolutly wonderful story and im glad i found it to read..

keep up with your writing dude..

This story is so good. I'm not going to lie. For a little while when Jim was hanging out with Odin, Mitch, Brandon, and Hunk, I got a bit bored reading about how depressed they were and how much they hated everything and everyone. It got old. But now things have picked back up with all the recent suicides and Mitch stealing the Glock from Odin's room. I can't wait to see what happens in the next chapter. And also, Kat was a breath of fresh air in this story where everything is so gloomy and depressive. I hope you write more about her, too.

...this is so true. I mean... he actually seems like he could be a real character. Jim, that is. Amazing writing.

And that is one mean therapist. He's the one who deserves to be locked up. .

Damn, this is... wow. It's ineffable. Well, I've only read the first chapter, but I really like it, and definitely plan to continue reading the rest of what you've posted.

I've only read the first chapter but you've got me interested with the whole thing and I plan to read the rest. I admire that you've set up an imperfect protagonist. I'd be careful of focusing entirely on his internal response to life or his wallowing in self pity - though that would be an important part of the text considering that the theme is suicide - but I've yet to read the rest of your text so I'll reserve my comments for later. Your fluid use of language makes for an enjoyable read.

All the best.

I know what you mean about not taking the advice to heart. Its your story.

But I do have some thoughts.

I like how descriptive everything is, how you paint the scene and all that, but I'm not sure about the content.

Not what the story is about but how you tell it on a larger scale than just the writing. (that was confusing).

What I'm saying is that the writing is phenomenal but the story is lagging. The main character's life is drab, dull, a cesspit, etc. You got that across well enough with the frist couple chapters. Now its just repetitive and plotless.

That's the only negative thing I have to say. Great job and keep it up!

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I really love the blunt descriptions and attitude. It goes perfectly with the dark theme. :]

This is really good. Please continue to update.

holy $#!.

this is so awesome. UPDATE!.

I can't even find anything to criticize (which NEVER happens).

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wo. wow. this. is. amazing.

I usually get disgusted at too much profanity, but this really fit the cahracter.

I also don't like a lot of the stuff people post on here but I loved this one.

Well done and keep it up!

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