Hahaha Do you want it now? That's such a stupid thing for Mark to say. Poor Evelyne.
I liked the peper spray Gabby had.
This is really cute. There's just one part that I'm a little condfused about. If Evelyne's never been to a club before, what was the thing that she almost got arrested for? She called it an ilegal club at once point, but I guess that's different than what she's at now?

This chapter made me think of so much. I shall now make a list!
1)HENRY! In a show I love, there's an adorable nerdy sarcastic character named Hnery who I absolutely love so he was the first to pop in my head. That, and I love that name.
2) The twins! Weasley twins in Harry Potter (Fred is my future husband, lol). So cute!
3) Daniel, another of my favorite names!
4)When Mark calls her E-V, I thought of V for Vendetta. Awesome movie!
5) The contacts thing. TOTALLY know how she feels. I've never even considered contacts because the thought of putting them in creeps me out.
I think that's it...

I like this so far. I like that there's still a little mystery surrounding everything. Can't wait for more!
PS: This is the longest review I have ever written.

Wow, lots of mystery surrounding this. Can't wait to see what happens next. Like it so far!

i like this story! update soon please!

"I stood in the middle of the living room, trying not to notice all the eyes that were focused on me. The guy that had kidnapped me — who I was beginning to think was the leader, by the way everyone else deferred to him — everyone to me."
The last part of the sentence didn't make sense to me.
Um . . .oh, and you didn't tell me that you updated! I like the characters. And Marks a jerk! He kidnaps a girl and forces her to become his slave?He is so lucky her parents are dead and cant send his sorry ** to jail.
hahaha. It's very humerous.

I remember reading this story when is was all scibbley and almost illegible. Now it's so much better. I didn't notice any spellinh mistakes or grammer issues . . .except maybe a misplace common, but not really sure were commons are suppose to go anyway, so maybe it's not misplaced.
Did you say the beggining of this story was a dream you had? It seems like one crazy dream . . .joining an illegal club? hahaha.
I should probably fix my own chapters, since . . .they're crappy with spelling issues and grammer flaws, but I have to go to school, and do alot of crap, and I think I'm sick from stressing myself out. Yep, it's fun dying from stress.
Hope to read your next chapter soon.