Nom nom nom. I'm still enjoying this, slowly working my way through! I loved the visual of Keyd stabbing himself in the eye to put his sword away.

Hi, this the second time reading your novel and I can Actually say I enjoyed it more, even though I knew the plot. Keyd is so innocently dominant that when his desires and passions come to fruition, they really stir something in this reader's chest! Alan is so wonderfully Emo that he makes me laugh so much, but he really can psychoanalyze everything and comes up with all the right answers. I love your story so very much and wait anxiously for the updates. Thank you for sharing you amazing creativity.

I can't believe you killed dad off. Alan could have just pulled the rejected oen from him.

I finally finished this one and now on to the next one. These stories really are great it's just hard to find the time to read anything these days for me.

HAHA sorry but when i read -

'“What?” I nearly barked, jumping to my feet, images of death-bringing garments suddenly crowding in on my imagination again.'

i just burst out laughing. hysterically. HAHA too funny. Gotta love your humor. ^^

But aside from that, love the story so far! :]]

Great story! But i was wondering... couldnt Alan just have sucked or like... taken the oen away from Keyd's father? like when he took the wong from Rysas brother?

*dies*

No~!


~forces herself out of a state of shock in order to review~


Wow. And Alan didn't try to absorb some of the Oen or something? I mean, if his body's rejecting it and it's leaving would kill him, it probably wouldn't have helped anything, but, I dunno...I'd kinda want to try absorbing his and replacing it with some of his antshil's (one "L"? Two?) oen on the off chance that it would have done SOMETHING. Ugh. Sucky.



Oh, and I suddenly had a thought about this whole frequency thing. I mean, it's kinda sad that I only think of this now that I've read the first to novellas (granted in it's all been in the same day, so I didn't have time to stew over it, but still), but if they're both talking in one language, but being heard in another, I...hm...this is going to sound stupid and trivial, but there's no other way to phrase this: does it look like bad language dubs when they speak? You know, with the lips moving to say one thing, but a completely different sound coming out?

Sorry, I truely don't mean to offend you, I'm just curious by nature. *shame*

Case and point:
I'm obsessed with three things: med studies, exercise, and FOOD~! So when you made that comment about how the meat looked like rabbit meat, but he couldn't know for sure...freakin' A...it made me want to join their epic group if only so I could see what kind of foods other worlds had. I wanted to see what kinds of different fruits or spices there would be and if they had food that THEY could eat but was toxic to people not from their world, things like that. I know that's really wierd, but it was just one of those little things that I had never thought of before, you know? It was just...huh, oh yeah, duh. I can't really explain it. Ugh, I fail. Hopefully you kinda get what I'm trying to say. Sorry for being such a freak about it all.


On a slightly more acceptable note, why didn't Alan just absorb Eldronrhet's thick-fog-hold-attack-thing on Keyd during the arrest? I dunno, Alan just seems like the "I'm gunna fucking protect the people I care about if you don't give me a DAMN good reason why I shouldn't" kinda guy. It seemed like something he would just do without ever thinking about it. *shrugs*


Ohmigosh! But I LOVED the scene in this last chapter where he got all "The Hell I dont!" on Eldronrhet. Oh my gosh. Freaking amazing. I was lovin' that. Like, goofy smile and random giggles that made my roommates wonder.


Jeez. I'm gunna freakin' cry when I get the the part that you haven't finished on this next arc. On the bright side though, it's midnight here and I have work tomorrow, so it'll probably last me all day. That's good at least...*cries* but I know I'll always want more.

I'm completely obsessed. Med school can wait. Epics like this don't come around every day ya' know. ;]


Ever your loyal fan,
Miranda

Marriage! YAY! Not death! Yay!

Your sex scene left much to the imagination. I liked that, because i could make it as perverted as I wanted to. ;)

No! How dare Ociir have feelings for Keyd! Okay, I can't really blame him, since Keyd is pretty awesome, but still. Poor Alan.

Oh dear. Keyd's father is here, and that can't be good at all. And poor Alan, thinking he's a replacement for Ociir, whether it is true or not. I just thought of something. Keyd's father wants him to get married, so he must be their for an arranged marriage! No!

Ah, I just finished reading Chiaroscuro... hmm, this isn't a proper review, but before I lose the thought, this particular chapter intrigued me.

Especially this part:

“You have always been,” I said, “a bastard, especially to me. We’re not even friends—we’re just friends with the same people. Why the fuck would you even want to help me? Why would you care?”

Law went a little tight-mouthed. I was getting pretty good at reading facial expressions now, after Keyd—and Law was uncomfortable about something.


... Hmm, could Law have a crush on Alan? I mean, so far we have an unfavorable view of him, but that might just be Alan's POV. I don't know if I'm reading too much into this, but if that is true, then I feel more sympathetic towards Law. Like, maybe underneath that jerky exterior, is someone who's just pulling Alan's pig tails.

Anyway, I hope at some point, we see Keyd acting jealous. Haha, it's just that that would be extremely hot... and I guess I really want to see some strong emotion Keyd can have over Alan. I mean, yes we see that in later chapters, but I feel like we only see Keyd fierce and passionate over Alan, when circumstance pulls them apart. Not, say, if Keyd was worried over losing Alan to anyone else. I wonder if Keyd has ever thought that.

And since Alan was jealous of Ociir, it's be nice for a complete turnaround. ;)

“Oh, snap,” I said, because I was an idiot young guy and sometimes that word just came out of me.

probably one of my favorite lines in a story, ever. i seriously burst out laughing when i read it.

i really do love this story. i only just caught up with the end of chiaroscuro and haven't had the chance to read nocturne yet, but i will! now that exams are out of the way, i have free time again. yay! definitely looking forward to further development of this story in the next book. :)

I finally got the time to finish this. I have to admit there might have been a tear or two. That ending just came out of nowhere, but it did explain Maedajon's intentions. Excellent as always. I'm looking forward to reading Nocturne... when I find the time. :]

I wish Alan could have removed his oen's like he had removed rysa's twins, that way they wouldn't have been poisneing him anymore