 Isca 2009-01-17 . chapter 1Monday: "I nursed tumors all alone." A line full of striking angst.
Tuesday: "I hurl javelins...inwards." Very creative imagery!
Wednesday: "Globules." Nice word-choice!
Thursday: "A clump that refuses to be molded." I like the bitter, frustrated, hopeless tone here.
Friday: "Rummages the private cabinets." You captured the embarrassment perfectly!
Saturday: I like that you made the Sabbath day Saturday instead of Sunday. Nice allusion to Judaism.
Sunday: "I want you to take this tusk with both hands." Aww! *Tear* What a beautiful (yet sad) line!
-Isca |