Wow,that was amazing. Wonderful,beautiful descriptions,and the ending genuinely surprised me. I found a few minor mistakes (like,at one point,it says 'women' instead of 'woman'), but...this story is still great. Awesome job, keep up the good work.

Beatles, babe, this is fabulous! That's what vamp stories should be: sexy and gory for no reason! Although I think you needed to add a lil more gore to it. The eroticism was great but on the first reading I didn't even realize she was dead. Maybe you should extend the "snap her neck". Either make a metaphor/simile out of it or give vampy a lil time to reflect over his prey?

Also: is this a habitual thing? Like does he go around and do this to a lot of women? If so make that clear. Cuz the only thing more horrifically-erotic than a homicidal vamp is serial killer vamp ;P

Um… what else? Oh! You have typo somewhere in the beginning. You wrote women instead of woman.

Okay that's all don't forget to tell everyone how mean my review was :P

Bubbles