I like the choppiness of it. It makes it raw and easy to believe that the author actually felt that way while writing it. Nicely done.

Write on!

I love how this one was written. How you cut things off rather abruptly and it made me have to break and think about the line. I love the emotion in it too. :)

Rolliepollie44

I Like it.

This is sad. There's not a ton of feeling here, though, I'd like to see you expand on ideas like this. Make sure that every line reflects some part of you.

Love,

Dia