Oh my goodness! -fansqueel- That was the best of transitions! I have high hopes for Aaron (he's my favorite now)! Oh!-wiggle-

Some of the dialogue was a little blunt, perhaps just for me, because (being a new kid a whole sheet-load of times) I don't think I would mention that I had mental problems, and was bi a conversation, but I understand that you probably needed Nights to know that about Aaron for the next chapter!-eyebrowwiggle-

I would recommend, perhaps, giving the chapter a little once over, just because of the tiny little typos. Also I liked the 'little hero' thingy, but I feel that it might have been a little over-used? I don't know, maybe it's just me again! (ack!)

I am simply dying to see what happens next! It wasn't even a cliff-hanger end, but I can just feel the connection between Nights and Aaron! Ouuh!

Good lord, what a delightfully chilling preface! Usually I find it difficult to read stories in first person because things like -I cried and fell to the floor- just strike me as without feeling, but I had no problem reading this!:)

Just one thing though, as for the tense, I am not sure. You put in words like 'fell' and 'were' so I was assuming past tense, but then in the sentence ('Not many...their very souls') it seemed as though in present tense. I could be wrong, but it just bothered me a little bit.

Off to read episode one! Thank you so much for this story, I simply cannot wait to continue reading!

There were some issues with tense (ex. ("I never thought that could happened to me.") ("I'm bless though to have my sister...") ("Our grandparents, Garret and Maria Black tries[tried] their absolute best to save us...") ("I shooked [shook] my head...")) and capitalization (ex. ("... but [w]ho really could save me?") ("Tiger [E]ye [H]igh [S]chool")) There was also an unnecessary word ("... a muscular tone body any guy—longed-- would want.") and a typo ("'... which [is] just us three.'") My final word of advice is to be careful with ellipses (…) since they were a bit overused in this chapter.

Aaron is like Nights’s clone! XD It’s like a match made in heaven! Also, I am so totally in love with Narissa. She’s so sweet and kind and I really hope that nothing bad happens to her. As I hope you can tell, I really liked the characters that were introduced here and, although I haven’t much to really say as of yet, I would love to see where this ends up going.

Well this is certainly an intense and deep preface to what I believe will be an intense and deep story. I like the dedication and I actually learned something from it. Until now, I'd never heard of Heaven's Gate and, my gosh, that's so sad. I've the feeling that this is a story that needs to be told and I'm eager to get started on the first chapter.

Looks good so far. This is definitely another for my favorite's list. I really like how this one started out as well. Too bad it's on hold because I'll have to wait for another update for a while, at least I have another chapter to read though. I'll probably do that when I get home.

Great stories, all of them and I definitely look for updates in the future! You're a great author who deserves more recognition.

Hey, I did like it but there were a lot of mistakes which sometimes made it hard to read... some of the grammar and punctuation isn't quite right. But otherwise, quite an interesting read, I'm looking forward to seeing where this is going. Thanks =]

Well, there's not much so far but it looks really promising, so I hope to read the next chapter soon! The idea is really interesting so I hope you continue this! x