 plumblossom 2009-05-03 . chapter 2Oh, please, continue in 3rd person. This is so not a 1st person story. You need a little distance because these guys are both kind of jerky. |
 Poptart Guava Kid 2009-04-22 . chapter 2I definitely like how this has started out! :) If you do 1st person you should do Ray's POV.
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 Lerene 2009-02-28 . chapter 2Is Tracy Ray's housekeeper? |
 Lerene 2009-02-28 . chapter 1Ray seems to have a good heart, to bad he had to spend a night in jail. |
 JtheChosen1 2009-02-02 . chapter 2very interesting story! keep up the good work, and i look forward to more!
plus, i like it in 3rd POV |
 Lost In The Ever After 2009-02-01 . chapter 2yes, i liked it and i am looking forward to more!! I like third person myself.
Peace, Love, Laughter~
Lost~~ |