Wow, you know I thought I had reviewed this, but apparently I hadn't. Sorry for not reviewing this story sooner. :/

This wasn't my favorite work of yours. There wasn't much to the story, it seemed very cliché, the characters weren't very developed, and overall, even though I know this is supposed to be short, it seemed unfinished rather than short. In fact, it seemed as if you had just written from a random place in the story and then ended the story when you felt like it. It also seemed like you tried to be suspenseful and mysterious, but there was no suspense or mystery built up anywhere in the story. Honestly, I cared about the characters during some parts of it, but some parts of it, I didn't. Because you're normally a creative spirit, I expected this to be an interesting turn on a story/theme that has been told/conveyed over and over again. However, to my surprise, everything about this short play was predictable.

However, on the plus side, the descriptions were good (although not as developed as they could have been) and the voices of the characters, which were pleasingly and strikingly different, were also good. This work showed hints of a good writer, but it didn’t exemplify your talents for storytelling or imagery. In addition, the writing itself wasn’t your best work. If you could just add more to this, I believe it would be much better. I think the problem might have been your lack of detail. You are usually so detailed with your writing that when I read this where you left some stuff out, it was kind of jarring for me.

Sorry this review was a little harsh, but you know me, I'm very honest when it comes to these kinds of things... :/

Very well done, nice twist at the ending. I like the idea of humans as the jerks for once; reminds me of xkcd. ...but you switch from numerical to word notation for the characters halfway through.

I really like this. It's clever, witty and well thought out. Have you written anything else? Please reply!