Is this God talking?
Um...interesting. I like the way you break the lines and how you used all lowercase letters for extra impact, like a whisper. But I don't quite get it. If the narrator is God, what kind of God? Does He/She/It care about the created person? And how and why does the creation vanish?

"i knew too well / how you vanished." lovely.
This is beautiful. I can tell that a lot of thought went into your line breaks. My only complaint is "slush. you, acting out". I would move slush. to the end of the previous line to avoid marring the flow of the poem. Otherwise, really nice! I really liked it.

Wonderful allusion to Rip Van Winkle! :D Very creative!

"Patriarchal absense." A very eloquent way of telling the reader that one of the character's grew up without a strong male presence in his/her life.

I thought this was a really cool poem...Its very detailed and creative. Great!