wow, this is absolutely beautiful! i love love love the last three stanzas. you have great description and metaphors in this, and i love the tone of the last line. just wonderful.

i would love opinions from a writer like you on my work, it would mean a lot to me.

that is amazing! i love your word choice, its beautiful how this flows. great job

wow. i really like your use of imagery and metaphors in this. it makes everything seem so real. i love it. keep this up!