SERIOUSLY, YOU ARE AMAZING!! I AM SOO GLAD I FOUND YOUR STORIES BECAUSE THEY ARE SOMETHING I'VE BEEN WANTING TO READ! Seriously, you have an amazing talent, and I love your endings and stuff. Keep up the great work, and I really enjoy reading your stories because they are imaginative, yet the way you write them is creepy, but in a good way. Wow, you have talent! Don't let it go to waste! yay!

Um...is Carrie thirteen? She shouldn't be driving...so she shouldn't have hit the tree.

A little detail goes a LONG way, add a little more spice and emotion. If Susie is the fearful, make us, as the read, feel fearful with her.

What's up with Tara? Is she angry? annoyed? Scared? I pick all of the above, so show that. She should be hysterical, at the least. They could ALL DIE, people tend to like being alive.
/shrugs shoulders/

Other then that, it was very creative!

Much Love,
Aqua

interesting, but i would have liked it more if it were longer... and a little more, well, dramatic for lack of a better word.

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Sequel or Prequel!

Surprise ending, for sure. I think it might have been a little more suspenseful if it were longer, maybe starting earlier in the day. That way, it would have added more contrast between how 'normal' all three girls were, and how bizarre the situation was. It also would have made the ending (with Carrie being involved with the killer) even more surprising.

Are you going to write a sequel explaining Carrie's motives?

I love it, and I want to know more about the mysterious boy character. The only thing that bothers me is the fact that Tara and Susie just sort of die off right away. Oh well, can't wait to see what direction this goes in.

woah i can send 2 reviews! dude thats like awesome!! nice story... put a banana in ur ear! u will never b happy if u live ur life in fear!! blah...ima bored...

only the mind of my messed up twisted friend could write this. if we dont go bowling then we might go pick up a pizza. bring some warm clothes cuz were gunna b walkin!! platypus!