|Reviews for HalfBreed: Book One|
| AbbieLou 4/12/10 . chapter 13
Yikes! Well, I still have my predictions although somehow i think I'm going to be terribly wrong. And did I miss something? What is her other ability? Hm... :)
| AbbieLou 4/12/10 . chapter 6
This is really good and I definitely have a few ideas about what is going on but who knows if they will be right! The knuckle cracking though! It drives me crazy when people do it in real life and I'm sad to say it's bothering me even reading about it. Oh well, I guess I'll have to get over it if I want to find out what's going to happen. :)
| Blackers 12/28/09 . chapter 10
im guessing that her dad was the vampir.
| Blackers 12/28/09 . chapter 9
tehehe chuck norris. im liking alix more and more. i think niki needs to reavaluate her options. aw dude clifhangers suck eletric socets! [i pride myself on my silly fake-prfanities]
| Blackers 12/28/09 . chapter 8
ok. if this dude is gonna try to protect her, then he needs to work out a better watch schedual. le gasp im not a canible! i asure you [crosses fingers behind back...lol jk] but seriously technology hasnt advanced far enough for us to eat unupdating authers over the internet...yet. [jk]
dont worry- i havnt read/watched twilite [and i dont plan to] this story is ausoumly cool. the grammer and spelling dosnt make my head hert. and the auther [i forgot yours and your charactors names alredy- sorry] has an aousoum sense of humer [even if she thinks that i will eat her]
| Ink-Stain'd 11/9/09 . chapter 13
I read your entire story in about an hour or more because it's that addictive. Funny that you left us off at a cliffhanger! The story's just getting started and I can't wait for you to update. I hope you update soon, like really soon maybe tomorrow soon. But that's just wishful thinking. I like your story, a lot! This is one of my new favorites in fact. Well yeah, I hope you update soon.
| AJ southern 9/27/09 . chapter 13
Really enjoyable book so far. original theme has me very curious. Hope you update soon :) Congrats on winning all those awards
| Mayuka 9/10/09 . chapter 12
This story is very well-written; you have a talent at writing prose. I had a little bit of a problem with the storyline, though, which I'm sure you've heard multiple times before. The problem is that it is too much like Twilight.
The venom thing, crazy newborns, being in the forest all the time, Kaleb's ability to read people's minds except for Alex's... there are other things as well, but they are all just too reminiscent of Twilight. And I know it's not your fault that everyone just happens to have read it, so all vampire stories are going to look like you're copying to some extent (even though was certainly not the first vampire romance author like people tend to assume), but it's up to you to make it seem more original.
I liked that you added the telepathy on Alex's end, but it is still too much like Twilight, at least in my opinion. But like I said, you are a good author and I think you should keep writing what you enjoy. So don't mind me. :D
| MagicalBagOfDirt 9/7/09 . chapter 13
Wow, awesome story. Can't wait for an update :) I love the fact that Alex has purple eyes.
| Guest 8/21/09 . chapter 13
wow this story is really good.. oh i saw that this story won a supernatural award or something.. congrats
really hope you update soon!
| CaraJoAnn 8/11/09 . chapter 6
okie dokie here goes- Lovin' the story so far, and absolutely adore the British accent. I was reading it out loud to myself, the closet I've ever come to being able to speak with an accent. I have no clue what Amelia is, but I'm gonna say that Fiona is some kind of slayer/hunter. I'm really interested in what Alex is...super strength, mind reading abilities, no need for medications, possible super sight, depending on how far away the tree was...she is an enigma not only to Kaleb, but also to me.
| omgitskandice 7/20/09 . chapter 2
Er, I mean je ne sais quoi
| omgitskandice 7/20/09 . chapter 13
Okay, so you really need to update. Like, seriously need to, becuase this story has become my crack (the drug, not what happens when ppl wear their jeans too low), and I can't be held responsible for what's going to happen when I start experiencing withdrawl.
But while I have a newfound obsession, I still need to objectively judge your story for Judge's Pick. So, here we go. You have very well-thought out characters who are logical, consistent, and extremely engrossing. You also have a plot that actually forces the reader to think instead of just throwing in twists and turns to make it exciting. And the story itself just draws you in as you read. Also, you have flawless spelling/grammar.
But, you also have a fair amount of similarities to Twilight in the beginning. While you can see it's coincidence, the reader still can't help but to think "is this person a twilight fan?" And at the beginning, the wording just seemed wrong/wordy or just off at some points. Like it was missing something. Lastly, your author's notes are almost necessary because without it, some things would get overlooked (too subtle) and somethings needed to be explained. Personally, I think A/Ns should be like commentary, and not like a "cliff notes".
But, yeah, hopefully I've been helpful and not too harsh. Good luck! And please update.
| omgitskandice 7/20/09 . chapter 12
So, you have a very developed character, but I feel like all of the family and mysterious past issues you alluded to by both Alex and Kaleb have been kind of forgotten for now. Kind of like they were set aside for the plot. I hope they are reintroduced soon.
Also, you do a good job of keeping Alex from becoming a Mary Sue. A lot of writers tend to over-idolize and kind of build up their character until they are practically God, but you almost underplay her abilities until about this point, keeping her real. It makes her easier to relate to. I really don't have much to say about Kalebecuase while he is a very rounded character, I feel that other than him being the usual mysterious love-interest,he really isn't as memorable as Alex. Other than that, I ap[laud you on developing your characters.
| omgitskandice 7/19/09 . chapter 7
Hm, more Twilight similarities. At least somwhat similar, but I do like how you are actually developing a PLOT and sticking to it and not just abandoning everything to document their doomed spiral into love.