such poignant beauty.

i really liked this. the last line especially was beautiful. :D

have a happy day!

Aw... That is so sad, and so true. It reminds me of something going on with a few of my friends, so Ive witnessed it all second hand.

Beautifully written

wow, been there! I like the way you set this poem up, it's very neat and tight and I love the end. it's frank and to the point. and it kind of hurts.

"and seconds are always remembered

as less than the first." i wish that more girls could understand this, lol

"they hide and they tell truth;/it’s always there no matter"... you switch from they to it, which sounded awkward

"but apart of our hearts"...a part. apart is like being far apart

I like this piece. Starting with all the similarities and then switching to the difference is a really great set-up. The only thing is with the eyes it seemed odd that you devoted two lines to the same thing since with the other parts you only do one line. That threw the format off a bit. I think you made a good use of the bolding though. Nice piece.

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This is very sweet, nice work. Keep writing.

been there.

done that.

i can relate to this. it was really well written. and i love the last line, mostly because it reminds me of my best friend.