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Reviews For: The Deconstruction of Prince Charming
loves him 2009-01-27 . chapter 5
I love how you portray her emotions. Clear and sharp enough that the reader understands and yet, she's not dumbed down as a character. My only complaint is that your first chapter wasn't as interesting as the other chapters. Also, you switch back from the second person to the first. from you to I. The switch always throws me off.
Update soon.
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