Lmao, this is amazing. Not only is it well written, it makes me laugh. Can't wait to see more!

It's erratic and spunky, but unbelievably, that's what reeled me into this whole story. A definite interesting spin-off from SM's creation. Smooth flow and nice quirky interactions between the characters. But might I suggest you don't follow all the scenes in the novel and instead chip in your ideas at some parts? It'll be more authetic and make a better read that way.

Nevertheless, nice job! ;)

~Jo