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Well done!

I really liked this tale. You’ve got a great introduction that pulls the reader in. You make great use of smell as a descriptive force throughout the story which really adds to the atmosphere. This story did remind me of Stephen King’s It and references to that might make more sense than the star wars ones. Keep writing.