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| Damien Vlashtov 4/20/09 . chapter 1
Kudos, you effectively capture the desperation of the magic-deprived mind. I feel it would be improved if you merged a few lines together. For instance, "The magician lifts/his hands, and yet", would feel better to me as "The magician lifts his hands,/and yet". You should also italicize "rabbit's foot", not just "foot"-the "rabbit's foot" is the object. Regardless, well done. I love the line "Hands cold, minds dark". So very apt.