Have you been updating? Or rather revising? I keep noticing small little details that I didn't read before. Either way its still amazing!

I love this story :) I hope everything goes well with your publishing endeavors. However, personally I'm very sad about Lilith's brother Alec. I secretly think there's enough angst for a side story ;)

YAY! I'M SO HAPPY NOW! I CANNOT WAIT FOR THE SECOND BOOK/THE REWRITE. ep! lol i love you ! ur such a great writer and im sure you'll get hundreds of offers. :):):):) keep up the fantastic work!

Omg! I love your story! Its the best one yet that ive read on frictionPress. And I just thought id let you know that I think you're a great story writer and I really hope you get your books published bc I would definitely buy it. No doubt! So yeah that's it, just wanted to say i'm a big fan:)

I don't see why you have to introduce the twins earlier. Bringing them in here for the first time works just as well.

This was a fun chapter. It really showed off the vampires'...human...side.

Hahahaha! That incident with Sorin was hilarious! Poor, naive and rejected Lily. I think that scene highlights the chauvinism of Nephilim culture more than any other description you've given so far. Their sheer disregard for women is astounding.

*reads on*

wow...that was absolutely awesome.

i've jst been reading this story straight for a couple of days and i probably wudv finished sooner if i was living on my own (cos then i wud ignore pretty much everything else, esp household chores)

but i absolutely LOVE it. like bigtime dude. Lucien is jst one hell of a character and i also think lily is a wonderfully lovable heroine- sometimes it jst feels a little fake but those scenes with her fighting the blood hound (awesome btw) were genuine and you cud really picture it and feel her strength. i was a little disappointed that lucien only cared for her wolf side more than anything else but with a potential 6 books, i guess they have time to grow...

u r such a tease with that date excerpt!! hehe. i'm glad u put it up though.

at first i thought u might hav finished all 6 bks and they were just waiting on ur profile for me to read (cue heart attack moment from over-excitement) but when i saw just the one...sigh. at least i get to read the first one all the way to the end.

good luck with publishing- u don't need it. i can't wait to read ur second one. all the best. x

Oh and also wanted to say I am a big mythology buff and I like how you mix all the different myths while staying true to their spirit. I am also pagan too so its nice to see someone treat the stories w/ respect and not butchering them like a lot of stories and shows/movies tend to do. People need to keep in mind these were peoples beliefs at one time and even today people believe in these "myths" or at least the general spirit of them and it angers me a little when people totally destroy them!

I also like using different myths as well in my stories. Lilith is one of my favs as well. Also like Egyptian myhtology...Isis is one of the coolest goddesses but Inanna/Ishtar is pretty kickass as well:) Love the holy trinity thing am trying to incorperate that into my story...

Anyway will be eagerly awaiting your next story~! I will definetely by your book -maybeeven spring for the hardcover :)

Wait I like the whole Lucien as a rock star thing -its hot! and no you can never have to much lucien! NEVER!
And yeah I agree w/ the person who said your story is better then twilight. Twilight is super dull compared to your story. And I will take Lucien ANY DAY over Edward!
and yeah I like Lily w/ a bit more of a spine. I can't wait to see her stand up to her "father" - speaking of which when are we gonna meet her real dad? Is he even still alive? hopefully we find more in the 2nd book!
one thing I missed in the re-write is the background on lily's mother about how she was raised w/ light elves and all- are you bringing that back for the the re-write? because the character of lily's mom intrigues me...something in the way you write almost leads me to believe she knows what is going to happen. I would love for you to expound more on this in the re-write or in upcoming books...heck I could see you writng a pre-quel of sorts using that as a storyline(see I love your sotry so much I already want pre-quels lol!)

I just finished reading your story and I swear, I couldn't put it down! It has to be the best and most well-written story on fictionpress. I am so hooked! And I'm waiting impatiently for November when I can hopefully read the second book. Just...wow. It had such an indepth story line, I loved how original it was and how different. You really went to great lengths to describe so accurately a supernatural world. I love the Lucien/Lillith dynamic. They bounce off eachother so well. I hope you succeed with this story. =]

Wow. It took me 27 hours to read all chapters and, beyond simple word choice and spelling errors, I think this is one of the best things I have read in quite awhile. It mosy certainly well and above the cliche garbage that litters this site. I sincerely hope you get published.

I'm definitely still intersted and good luck with all of that lol you've got a load on you!

I am so excited to hear about the introduction of a male vampire rival to Lucien, hopefully there will be some jealousy there. And I really can't wait to read the second book! (I read your original and this rewrite in a week, it was that GOOD!)My birthday is in November so that's really exciting for me to hear that there is a possibility of your sequel coming out.

I would buy your book if it were to be published! Hopefully, Barnes & Nobles or another large bookstore would buy some of your copies. That would be really awesome.

Just to let you know, your series is WAY better than the Twilight series. Honestly, I thought the first Twilight book was okay but the rest was awkward and over dramatic! The Slave of Heaven I think is really complex and it doesn't just revolve around Lucien and Lilith, though I really like their interactions, which is really good since most writers revolve their stories around the protagonists. I like how your story has many elements in there and characters. It makes for an interesting read.

So, I never reviewed any of your chapters but I'd just like to show my appreciation here. (:

Yay! I'm so excited to hear news on this story! Will you be posting the third rewrite? I can't wait to hear more about Luce and Lilith! This is so funny, because last night, I was just re-reading some of this story cuz I love it so much! Can't wait to hear more!

~dramalover21

i'm still interested and i still can't wait :)