completely beautiful. great job.

it's a curious story.

I love the last stanza. The image it brought to mind was beautiful. Beautiful poem.

-LoL

Your language is well developed.

I've added you to my Favourite Authors list.

Ha! So this was what you wrote last night and refused to let me read! Actually since u posted last night I probably should have just checked here first...

Anyway! Cool poem! (another love piece?hmm I'm seeing a pattern here.) Ending was def. my favorite.

really interesting progression; wasn't what i was initially expecting, but you've surprised me in a good way

i really like your descriptions like "crinkled corners
like a pup eager to please" and "Spitting on the ashes of caution
he walked into the sunset"

definitely didn't really understand your poem the first read through, but i like how it's not too straightforward and forces me to think and reread :]