| Reviews for Together in Minds |
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Wes 5/17/11 . chapter 1 Pff, this's like a crown of sonnets Like the trees and leaves They found each other this day Always together Do let me note that on the "Trees, between them" it only has 4 syllables, you might wanna revise that. So does "Each, every thing" but that can be fixed by just placing "and" between Each and every. -this does make me wonder, does it actually have to be 5-7-5? Perhaps 4-7-5 works as well.- Well, I'll stop checking on 'em like that. Do keep practicing I would like to see some more Onwards, keep going! |
Arcthalohs 2/14/09 . chapter 1These poems are good and well-written. I like the way that they fit together to tell a story even though each is only a handful of words. I believe the hidden haiku is: "Like the trees and leaves they found each other this day always together" |