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so i sing to the stars 2009-01-29 . chapter 1
I think this is beautiful, honestly, especially because the last paragraph instills such a great amount of hope in the reader. Yes, we all have our personal issues, but we can get through them. I just thought it was a nice change, for a slightly angsty poem to have a happy ending -- and happy endings do exist.
My only issue was with the rhythm, which I thought was awkward at times, but it's all good. Nothing that continuing to write won't help.
xx-Lauren-xx 2009-01-29 . chapter 1
Wow... that's all I can really say. What a powerful piece. You're such an amazing writer... and this is one of the best things I have ever read.

Beautiful.

Love,
Lauren. ♥
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