Very good, I really liked it.

This was really amazing - the way you pictured it and put it down.

This had amazing imagery, great descriptions, it made me feel right.. there. I could picture everything perfectly and the words you used were amazing, the idea was really, really awesome. I liked it! :)

Rolliepollie44

I hope you plan on adding more! This would make a good beginning for a novel. I am particularly curious as to what the time has to do with the voice's appearance. Perhaps you should describe your character more, though. To help give one an idea about the physical as well as the mental state she is in.