Nice! I like how both the narrator and the sister get personified within three short stanzas. And I kind of know the feeling of not being able to connect with younger family members. It's pretty sad. Anyway, again, nicely done. =)

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I agree about the title. It's a bit too long I think. Though I do like one you have now better than Sisterhood, that's a bit too cliched I think. I think the idea of the title (the generation gap) is a great one, maybe get rid of the word awkward to make it less wordy. Definitely I would get rid of the word the though it doesn't really seem important.

"and a Mexican wave of yawning."... i didn't get the idea of Mexican wave, maybe I am missing something? I also didn't understand why her love for motorbikes was not a teenage thing? Unless I misunderstood that line.

I do like the piece though. As always your descriptions and word choices are wonderful. I also think the italics work well and I like the idea. I have a younger sister so I can relate to some extent.

The first stanza sets the scene well; the imagery is calm and relatable. The second stanza is my favourite, especially the last two lines. The idea that she looks at a female clerk connects so well to the line, "She fancies herself an enigma." I don't mind the format, but the title may need work. Keep up the good work :)

You need to let the sentences flow because the piece reads that way. Or seperate lines by punctuation or something. As it is, the format doesn't enhance the piece/doesn't seem to fit.

Otherwise, I like it.

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