Review Marathon this weekend (link in my profile)!

This isn't your best piece. I do like some of the images you have like clock stopping, it works well. However, I think it was a bit repetitive and not in a good way. I also think it was a bit all over the place with the train of thought. I couldn't really follow the story. I might just work a bit on the piece and I'm sure it could be really great.

The clock has stopped?

I like that line, cuz its just really cool for some reason! Great poem!

A good poem. I like how you finished the sentence at the very end of the poem: The time stopped...When it was time to say goodbye.

As always, beautiful work. This is very good, nice work.