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Isca 2009-02-05 . chapter 2
"These eyes that weep." The sorrow here is almost sacred; it's beautiful!

"Those who know that inside I have died." Oh wow! The utter pain and hopelessness here is powerful and well-written!

"Hide the tears that fall inside." A wonderful depiction of hidden inner-pain.

It flowed and rhymed well. I think I like this edited version the most, but the first one is still nice too!

-Isca
chartonjeremiah 2009-02-01 . chapter 1
This is not the usual structure to your poetry but you should do it more often as it works well for you. I agree with what Isca said about your choice of words but for me the penultimate stanza is the favourite.

You do a lot of good writing so it's always good to see output from you.
Isca 2009-01-31 . chapter 1
"My mind is rendered calm." Lovely!

"Just to circumvent." Nice word-choice!

The final stanza is my favourite. The message and imagery is great. The poem rhymes well and the structure's good. :)
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