 Isca 2009-02-05 . chapter 2"These eyes that weep." The sorrow here is almost sacred; it's beautiful!
"Those who know that inside I have died." Oh wow! The utter pain and hopelessness here is powerful and well-written!
"Hide the tears that fall inside." A wonderful depiction of hidden inner-pain.
It flowed and rhymed well. I think I like this edited version the most, but the first one is still nice too!
-Isca |