Pale hibiscus swaying/veil of dwindling. These are very strong words. These poems are really good. You are one of my favorite authors now. Good job. Please read and review my stuff.

Absolutely beautiful. I love how you describe winter as a "viel." Keep up the awesome writing!

Still at it, eh? I remember seeing you working with this form more than a year ago, I think. I'm glad you did because this was nice to read. Beauty in brevity, as always. Kudos for sticking with it!

This is very good. I like how you created such a beautiful image in only four lines. Nice work with this, I liked it.