Hey Sarah! I am in computer! Reviewing your poem. Happy? I hope so, cuz' this poem is depressing.

I cry. I feel bad for our soldiers who die. Your poem is already wrong.
OMG this is sad. With the death and mourning... if you wore more makeup you could be emo.

Does the press ever lie? (Ok, I is sorry. You are right, I just need stuff to commentate on).
Did I not say that I cry for the rest?


They carry now the burden,
Wow... this is really good. I love it alot. It really is sad, and if I wan't in school I would cry. I know I was being difficult just to annoy, but seriously, this is good. I must favorite this. Good job, I can see why it took so long.

this made me cry for it is so true. So many soldiers are dead, our men and women. They need to come home before more become nameless faces.

Hmm, very good, I liked the messege, and over all flow, but at points it seemed kinda weak, like you struggled to think of how to say it. It looks like you just gotta keep writting, and VERY soon you'll be making an even bigger smash, so keep it up, Peace