"Last night Mom sent me out to get my medicine so she could go God knows what with Rick."
I believe you meant 'do God knows what with Rick.'
Just pointin out the little stuffs. :]

Like:

"was the first thing Liam said once we were in earshot. He wasn't one to sugar coat anything, he tells it like it is and that's what I liked about him." ...I've noticed in a few [rare] areas, you confuse the tenses. Like, here, you have past, which becomes present. The majority of your story is in past, so it would look better as:
'He wasn't one to sugar coat anything; he told it like it was, and that's what I liked about him.'
Or something like that.
[;
Anyways, about the story itself, it's certainly grown on me!!
Grey... dang. Definitely intriguing, and kinda hot. I wanna know!
You're impressive with your suspense, and I think that Madden's reaction to having Grey in her bead was realistic.
I would've kicked him where the sun don't shine, personally.
^-^
I cannot wait for more, no lie.
Update SOON please!
And, have you given up on Lyrics?
My hear was attatched to all of those characters.
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Hope to hear from you soon!
All the best,
Kayla
[ps. If you're in the giving mood, I'd love to hear what you think about my new story, Room 475. I totally understand if this isn't possible or you just plain don't wanna, however! Thanks!]

"They were narrowed and, if looks could kill, I'd be dead and six feet under in the next second."
Favorite line. Classy. :]
Typo:
"Sure, I all Rick wanted to do was sleep."
Perhaps you meant: 'Sure, I know all Rick wanted to do was sleep.'
Or something.
*shrugs*
Anywho, too short! I want more. I am definitely intrigued, and the whole 'sixth sense' thing was funny.
^-^
Onto the next one.

Hey!
It's me again! Tahaha. [btw, I got a new pen-name.. this is singing.in.my.undies. in case you were confused. I know I would be.]
Anyways, I'm going to read and review each delectable chapter on here.
Interesting start.
I liked how it started right into the story, and then backtracked... even though I got a bit confused. The narrater seemed to jump around ALOT.
For example:
"That's why it was so hard for me to open up to anyone as I grew up, but eventually I got the best three guy friends a girl could ask for.

Liam, Ashford, and Caden.

But I'll get to them later."
And then it went back into describing her mothers working schedules/ethics.
It threw me for a loop.
And I noticed a typo:
"I stopped to look out the window and groaned when I saw that I had started to rain."
I believe it is supposed to be 'and groaned when I saw that IT had started to rain.'
Other than those minor tidbits, I am deeply intrigued.
I love how you were able to create character development in such a short time.
On to the next one!
;D

interesting premise!

:] OKAY.
I liked it.
and she seems a bit like a too-tough cookie. You might want to tone her down just a TAD. The guy was left alone in an alley, for god's sake.

I know you know I has a few issues with guitar, but I'ma huge fan of this one.
update soon!

:D i love it.
write more soon! :P

Please update soon on this. very interesting concept. Can't wait to see how it progresses from here!

OMG! you are now my favorite fictionpress writer. I've always loved your stories but this just completes it. I run (and love)Cross Country, so when i read this i was like omg this has to be good.
Please continue with this, I can't wait to read more!