This is one of my favorite stories ever.

I love the details and imagery of Sheva's clothing and appearance, it gives the story a poetic edge.

I love the fight for dominance between both of them. (Who doesn't love some great, gay smut?)

I love the feelings they just discover that have been there for a long time.

I wish it never ended!

Much love,

Lil' Monster

nice oneshot. very interesting power play. great job!

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It always amazes me how much story a good writer can pack into one of these one shots. This one gave me such a clear idea of who the characters were without ever really coming out and decribing them, and I love that.

I think I held my breath through the whole story. If you ever want to expand it, more background on the narrator would be good. Really liked it.

Whose your daddy now, bitch?

I thought one of them was going to say that...

They didn't.

I felt cheated.

I'm over it now though.

I like this! : D

oh so very different.

The characters were terribly amusing.

Oh and also:

brownie points for using the name Sheva.

Whoa. That about much covers it. Whoa.

That was really, really hot. Gotta love the hate/love thing :3 And I like the dynamic of their relationship, especially the struggle for control. Yum.

i would love to see Sheva point of view! i really liked your story

It's always about control. _

Great story, really! I think this story is hot and sweet at the same time. Or should I say intriguing?

This really was an enjoyable read!