 Andrea Lotte 2009-03-15 . chapter 1Haha, you published this on my birthday. That's pretty cool.
Anyway, I love how you said you "saw something sun-like and brilliant...when I die." That was easily my favourite bit. To be honest I'm not so sure about the word "instinctually" in the fourth stanza. It seems to break the flow a little bit. But other than that, really nice work! |