thnks for the chappy ^^

Sorry it's been so long, I've been working on a new story and this story was actually a part of my inspiration to write my own vampire story. I'd be honored if you'd read it, it's called Shattered Illusions.

Now, on to my review.

Even though I like Revilo and Yuki, I can't help but to feel bad for Tai. I hope that he finds someone to latch on to. He's got a genuinely good heart and he needs someone to love.

I like the contrast you made on Imperial Village as well. Usually one would stick to the anime side of it and make it something of a wealthy castle-like village but you managed to put a dismal spin on it and turned it in to something interesting.

The Tamaki thing seemed a little random, but then again the scene changed very fast. I also think that the fight could have been a little longer to put more of a struggle with Tai and the beast but you're obviously not finished with that scene yet. Great job on a cliffhanger that is definitely noteworthy for the series. I certainly hope that Tai will come out of it alright.

“Just other day here I went and tried to get me a little kitty …if you catch my drift. Damn it all if the girl wasn’t some Neko boy dressed in drag. The moral of the story is you should be wary of what you ask for you may get it and that much more!”

OMG! That's freaking hilarious for no apparent reason! It kind of reminds me of a character of mine in Shattered Illusions named Hizaki, who is a drag queen and looks completely female.

Revilo's reaction was also priceless. It's usually the way that I react to a funny joke like that, either that or I'm over there chuckling to myself in perverted glee.

For some reason, the boy falling into Revilo's arms was a touching scene. It provided some depth into his character and gave us a small glimpse into the soft side of his heart.

All in all, beautiful chapter! I highly enjoyed it and I can't wait until your next update! Sorry I'm taking so long with TWUTS and I loved your fanart, it definitely gave me some inspiration!

As soon as I get well, I'll be working on it once more. Until then, I hope that you'll stop by and read Shattered Illusions and tell me what you think of it.

I'm finally caught up on this story! I'm so glad! This is slowly becoming tied with Working for Affection. This chapter was perfect and I didn't see a thing wrong with it. Keep up the wonderful updates and I'll definitely read more.

Oh, TWUTS will be updated this weekend, so look for it. ^^

Well, this chapter was very good. I like your action scenes and the fact that both Tai and Revolio are showing a bond towards Yuki make for a very interesting story so far.

My only crit is that a bite to the neck would equal death to the donor, the jugular and many other important cardiatric arteries are located in the neck and it would have insured Yuki's death.

Most vampires will bite on the shoulder, crook of the neck or arm in places that no vital veins are.

I did like the biting scene, however. I think it should have been a bit more drawn out, since it was an important turning point in the story but you did a wonderful job.

I love your cast and how all of your characters are coming together. You're good at giving them distinct personalities and traits.

Sorry I'm late, I've been trying to catch up on reading other's works. I'll be giving you another review shortly.

Wow. I am quite interested. Do continue...

Finally! I am nearly caught up on reading chapters! I really like Tai's character and I think that information should be elaborated on more. It was a basic summary and I'd love to get a more tragic feel from a detailed flashback or two. I hope you'll bring that to light in later chapters.

I also like how the relationship between Yuki and Revolio is coming about. I see that she at least sympathizes a little with his current condition.

I look forward to your next chapter and I'm definitely liking this more and more with every chapter.

Best wishes and good luck,

Melissa

wow... I haven't reviewed for a while.. hehe! As usual I love it! Great chappie! I just hope you can update as soon as you can.
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Whoa! This is quite good! Nice beginning! I'll add this to my faves later cuz I have things to do. If it's okay with you, would you like to see my stories? I'm working on TCR (The Catalyst's Rebellion) and I recently started a new one called Firefly's Enchantment. Wanna see? Sorry to ask in case you're busy. I'll read more of your works later. I have things to do. Keep up the good work!

This is cool. Not a bad development, it seems that things are heading the right way, especially with the Hunter Society. I bet Jizo is going to sneak back in there again, the underworld I mean.

And Yuki throwing the bunch of leaves into the fire and smoking the room was amusing. Nicely done, I think. Though the grabbing of her chest is a little cliche.

I hope to read more soon!

The thing about Jizo destroying his humanity has proven true in a lot of anime. Undergoing complete transformation to a machine takes away free will and kind of places you in a one-track mind ex. 'kill, kill, kill' and it seems to be a bit of Jizo's problem. I'm writing a story called Synthetic Emotions that has a lot to do with the boundaries between robotic science and what it means to be human as far as how close can it actually be without problems arising. It's nice to know that someone seems to agree with me.

The perverted moment between Revolio and Yuki was quite humorous. It's moments like that which make me like that couple.

Sorry, I'm voting that Yuki stay with the vampires. I think she has more of a plce there then with the humans. I don't know, I'm not sure that I really like the intent of the humans.

All-in-all, a great chapter with a good amount of nicely done action. Wonferful job!

That as fun! But if I were Yuki I would trust the human because I know I wouldn't be able to make it out of Hades alone. And some action! Cool! I hope to see more soon!

The comment about the girl's mother, in the olden ages it was not uncommon to be married at 14. In fact, most brides were married from 14-15 and 16-18 was considered too old to be married. Since people had shorter lifespans in the fuedal ages and things of that nature, they considered 17-20 to be the equivilant of being an old hag. Just a bit of interesting information incase you didn't know it.

Revilo is a strange one. He must have an ultirior motive to marrying her. Vampires don't eat people, simply drink their blood and most vampires will not use a child as a blood source, nor will they turn a child into a vampire. A blood donor is usually someone who mutually agrees to give the vampire their blood, people who are not donors are killed. I wonder what his deal is anyway. He's beginning to interest me with his little plot.

I really like Tai, I think he's probably high on my favorites list right now.

Silver bullets are solely a tactic used to kill werewolves but a bullet to the skin would definitely weaken a vampire. Silver is a weakness solely to werewolves, so it would be the fleshwound that slowed Revilo down.

About your Kageri attack, you may not want him using it all of the time to avoid the Mary Sue. Perhaps you could put stipulations on it i.e. It drains his powers too much to use it more then once or he can only do it at a certain time. It could even require that he drink more blood in order to use it. Just suggestions but if you have it covered, you can just ignore this, lol.

This fight looks promising. I wonder what will come of it.

All in all, you have a pretty good chapter with beautiful imagry and good character development. Good job and I look forward to seeing you next chapter.

If I'm not mistaken, Revilo is a reference to reviled. And why is an Irishman a Japanese hunter's disciple? But thinking back, Hyde isn't a Japanese name either...and Kumiko, Yuki's mother is a Japanese, so I can see a certain link there. In other words, Yuki's father was a European who settled down in Japan, right?

Besides, I don't know why, but the police don't seem to be doing their job. A murder just took place in the house next to Yuki's and there's no commotion? The Hunter's Society covered it up then, I'm left to assume.

But it was fun to read and the plot is getting interesting. I'm looking forward to future chapters!

Vampires are, at the most five times stronger then a normal human. Also, they don't eat people and to be honest, not all need blood to survive. They also are not dead nor are they immortal. They can live 250 years at the most.

I was also a little confused. Are you saying Underworld City is Hell in your world, or is like hell...or maybe they simply call it hell.

This was a pretty good chapter so far. I don't have much to comment on, since only a few things have happened. Keep up the good work and I'll continue to read this interesting work.

Hi! I just read your story and I really liked it! Its a very classic story about vampires and humans. Not do be annoying, but I do agree with your other reviews...please stay away from other vampire books...if you do you will eventually stray away from your own wonderful and creative ideas. I say, stick with old folk lore and research your heart out until something clicks! But in any case, your story was really great!